From Stanislaw.Mrowczynski@fuw.edu.pl Tue Jan 17 17:08:36 2012 Date: Tue, 17 Jan 2012 17:07:42 +0100 (CET) From: Stanislaw Mrowczynski To: Fotios Diakonos Cc: kperl@if.pw.edu.pl, Davis Nikolaos , Gazdzicki Marek , Stroebele Herbert , Peter Seyboth , Nikos Antoniou Subject: comments Dear Fotis, Below there are my comments on the 2-nd draft. 1) I would suggest to add a comment to present our findings in the context of numerous studies of intermittency in p-p and A-A collisions. In particular, a comment on power-law behavior found in p-p collisions would be needed, in my opinion. 2) In the very first sentence `The current understanding of the QCD phase diagram, as supported also by lattice calculations (...)', I would remove `also'. 3) p. 1, I would change the sentence `Then the hadronic degrees of freedom (pions, protons, neutrons) become unstable (...)' into `Then, the hadronic phase of pions, protons, neutrons becomes unstable (...)' 4) p. 2, left column, 3-rd line, I would change `The quantum state which carries the quantum numbers (...)' into `The quantum object which carries the quantum numbers (...)' 5) p. 2, left column, 7-th line, I would change `however as the corresponding thermodynamical conditions are extreme the condensate will be unstable, decaying mainly into pions (...)' into `however the condensate is unstable, decaying mainly into pions (...)' Best regards, Stanislaw