From Stanislaw.Mrowczynski@fuw.edu.pl Tue Jan 17 17:08:36 2012
Date: Tue, 17 Jan 2012 17:07:42 +0100 (CET)
From: Stanislaw Mrowczynski <Stanislaw.Mrowczynski@fuw.edu.pl>
To: Fotios Diakonos <fdiakono@phys.uoa.gr>
Cc: kperl@if.pw.edu.pl, Davis Nikolaos <nikolaos.davis@cern.ch>, Gazdzicki Marek <marek.gazdzicki@cern.ch>, Stroebele Herbert <stroebele@ikf.uni-frankfurt.de>, Peter Seyboth <pxs@mppmu.mpg.de>, Nikos Antoniou <nantonio@phys.uoa.gr>
Subject: comments

Dear Fotis,

    Below there are my comments on the 2-nd draft.

1) I would suggest to add a comment to present our
findings in the context of numerous studies of
intermittency in p-p and A-A collisions. In
particular, a comment on power-law behavior found
in p-p collisions would be needed, in my opinion.

2) In the very first sentence `The current
understanding of the QCD phase diagram, as
supported also by lattice calculations (...)',
I would remove `also'.

3) p. 1, I would change the sentence `Then the
hadronic degrees of freedom (pions, protons,
neutrons) become unstable (...)' into `Then, the
hadronic phase of pions, protons,
neutrons becomes unstable (...)'

4) p. 2, left column, 3-rd line, I would change
`The quantum state which carries the quantum numbers
(...)' into `The quantum object which carries the
quantum numbers (...)'

5) p. 2, left column, 7-th line, I would change
`however as the corresponding thermodynamical
conditions are extreme the condensate will be
unstable, decaying mainly into pions (...)'
into `however the condensate is unstable,
decaying mainly into pions (...)'

     Best regards,

       Stanislaw