From pxs@mppmu.mpg.de Tue Jul 10 16:00:23 2012
Date: Tue, 10 Jul 2012 16:00:22 +0200 (CEST)
From: Peter Seyboth <pxs@mppmu.mpg.de>
To: Szuba Marek <Marek.Szuba@cern.ch>, Bialkowska Helena <Helena.Bialkowska@fuw.edu.pl>, Andras LASZLO <laszloa@szofi.elte.hu>, Gazdzicki Marek <Marek.Gazdzicki@cern.ch>, Mitrovski Michael <Michael.Mitrovski@cern.ch>
Subject: Fourth draft of the azimuthal-correlation paper

Dear Marek,

Thanks again for preparing the 4th draft of the paper. I read
through it and have a number of recommendations:

- the NA45/CERES results are published in:
        D.~Adamovaet al., Phys.Lett. \bf{B678}, 259 (2009).
   Please take a look, perhaps the way you quote them has
   to be modified slightly. In principle we could compare
   all 3 centrality ranges.

- section II, last sentence: this should be expanded to
   explicitly describe the trigger (valid beam signal in
   scintillation counters + Eveto (nucleus-nucleus) or
   S4 anti (p+p) collisions.

- systematic errors, lines 193-199: we should give an
   approximate value for each of the 3 sources.

- the variable names in Eq.6 and Figs.3,4 do not agree,
   please make them the same.

- Fig.10: replace "Fit S" -> "S" in vertical axis label.

- lines 355-356: please write more explicitly what you
   intend to convey here, it is ipossible for me to understand.

- Abstract: the last sentence needs to be changed to reflect
   better the Summary and Conclusions of the paper.

Best regards,   Peter



On Wed, 4 Jul 2012, Peter Seyboth wrote:

> Dear Marek and EC members,
>
> I propose to discuss the new version of the paper at the next
> NA49 EVO conference on July 11. I will include this as the last
> point of the agenda. Please let me know if you disagree and
> please read the new draft.
>
> Best regards,   Peter
>
>
> Begin forwarded message:
>
> Date: Fri, 29 Jun 2012 17:27:15 +0200
> From: "Szuba, Marek (IKP)" <Marek.Szuba@kit.edu>
> Cc: Andras LASZLO <laszloa@szofi.elte.hu>, Bialkowska Helena
> <Helena.Bialkowska@fuw.edu.pl>, Gazdzicki Marek
> <Marek.Gazdzicki@cern.ch>, Mitrovski Michael
> <Michael.Mitrovski@cern.ch>, Seyboth Peter <pxs@mppmu.mpg.de>
> Subject: Re: Fourth draft of the azimuthal-correlation paper
>
>
> Dear all,
>
> Having implemented the vast majority of recent suggestions, attached
> you will find the next draft of the manuscript. Moreover, you can find
> the source LaTeX files in a Subversion repository on lxPlus:
>
> file:///afs/cern.ch/user/s/szuba/group/paper/SVN/trunk
>
> to which everyone with an NA49 account has got write access.
>
> Regarding the discussion on quoting the value(s) of the track
> impact-parameter cut, I came to realise that even though these values
> vary from reaction to reaction they are actually very similar - 1.5 cm
> for p+p and 1.3-1.4 cm for all other data sets used for the analyses
> discussed in the manuscript. Therefore, instead of reintroducing the
> sigmas I simply gave the value of 1.4 cm.
>
> Looks like the only thing that is left is deciding what to do with
> quantification of peaks!
>
> --=20
> MS
>
>
> --=20
> MS
>