Hsu:

The draft reads nice.
I would suggest to add a strategy description about the background estimate strategy. e.g. Normalization of top and W+jet through control region scaling (if that's the case)..., etc.

Here are a few slide by slide comments:
 
p2 Higgs boson -> the Higgs mechanism
    SM -> Standard Model (SM)

p4 Nice place to add theory reference paper with hyperlinks

p5 qq' -> q\bar{q}'

p7 to p9 are you allowed to show data?

p7 the data/MC comparison doesn't look so great.

p11 How is the fake estimate implemented? Is it isolation cut? It will be nice to briefly define the method and provide references.

p12 It's good to define the definition of m^lep_{VLQ}.

p15 It will be more impressive by highlighting improvement since previous analysis.